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雅思写作: 九大细节问题

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  备考雅思写作考试,考生除了掌握写作技巧之外,还要注意细节。今天,小编为大家带来大雅思写作九大细节问题介绍,希望考生多多参考,如果自己有类似的错误,要及时更正。

  1. 双谓语错句

  There be句型属于双谓语错句高发句型,因为句中的be动词已经是谓语,而句子后面的动词通常是定语从句中的成分,故不能作为主句中的谓语。例句中同时出现了“were”和“study”,根据上面的分析,were应该是谓语,而study for career应该是定语从句,因此,例句应修正改成:

  For those under 26,there were 80% students who studied for career. 或者For those under 26,there were 80% students studying for career.

  又如:Causes for this phenomenon are comprehensive but the major reasons contribute to this problem can be identified from three perspectives. 应改成:

  Causes for this phenomenon are comprehensive but the major reasons contributing/which contribute to this problem can be identified from three perspectives.

  2. 句子不完整

  e.g. The most popular kind of transport was by road.

  句中主语是the most popular kind of transport,谓语动词(系动词)是was,而byroad按照语法应该是方式状语,此句缺乏表语。

  应改成:

  The most popular kind of transport was road.

  又如:Many factories in order to get more profits,which made waste water and waste gas.

  去除目的状语“in order to get more profits”和非限制性定语从句“which made waste water and waste gas”, 剩下的是many factories,不能作为一个句子。根据此句想表达的意思,应改为:

  Many factories in order to get more profits made waste water and waste gas.

  3. 主系表结构使用错误

  e.g. We are impossible to make any progress without correcting the mistakes.

  此句的主干结构是:we are impossible“我们是不可能”,表意不对。这种表达在英语中对应的句型是:It is…for…to…,所以应该改成:

  It is impossible for us to make any progress without correcting the mistakes.

  类似的错误例句还有:People are very convenient to get information on the Internet. His profession is a teacher.

  4. 情态动词后的动词原形和动名词的使用出错

  e.g. Another equally vital point to be considered is that building them may costs much money and energy.

  这种错误可能是笔误,在雅思作文中偶尔出现不至于扣分,但是通篇都是这样的错误,那么肯定是有影响的。

  e.g. Another point to be discussed is that more time spending on computersis harmful to children’s mental health.

  “花更多时间在电脑上”这个动词短语作为主语应该要用动名词形式:

  Another point to be discussed is that spending more time on computers is harmful to children’s mental health.

  5. 标点符号用错

  e.g. As far as I am concerned,people should take exercise and relax themselves on a weekly basis. Because it offers great opportunities to release their stress.

  Because引导的句子做原因状语从句,既然是从句,那么前面就不应该使用句号使其独立成句,而应该改成逗号,because首字母小写。

  6. 词性使用错误

  e.g. One possible solution is using the new energy to instead of the traditional energy.

  Instead of是介词,而这里构成to do(不定式),只能用动词。因此,可改为:

  One possible solution is using the new energy to replace the traditional energy.

  e.g. Nowadays,some students study many subjects in university,which leadsto that they suffer great mental pressure.

  Lead to中to是介词,后面不能直接加句子,因此可在leads to后加一名词,构成同位语从句:

  Nowadays,some students study many subjects in university,which leads tothe fact that they suffer great mental pressure. 或Nowadays,some students studymany subjects in university,which makes them suffer great mental pressure.

  7. 从句的误用和滥用

  e.g. The reason why I assert it is necessary for government to provide better education and health care for rural areas because it can ensure all citizens to have access to them.

  “why…rural areas”在句中作the reason的定语,固定句式“the reason why…isthat…”why引导的定语从句和that引导的表语从句连用,气势磅礴,这就是所谓的高分句型。

  e.g. In this essay,I will discuss what those,who are two kinds of peoplein this topic,are how to think and how to choose. 实再迂回婉转,不知所云。

  8. 表达单一,词不达意

  文章是思想的载体,而词是这个载体的基本组成要素。没有单词,就无法准确地表达思想。由于所掌握的单词有限,往往使学生感到自己“满腹的心里话不知怎么说”,为了写完一篇250多字的作文,只能搜肠刮肚,勉强拼凑,结果使思路受到限制,写出来的句子总是不能表达出自己的本来意图,文章主题反倒成了载体的奴隶。

  为了弥补词汇量的不足,一些学生就把一些熟悉的单词、简单的句子结构重复使用来避免犯错而使文章显得单调、呆板,甚至观点和见解也因此大打折扣。对单词含义的一知半解,使得学生在写作时生搬硬套。把汉语成语硬生生地逐字对译,如:把“成竹在胸”译成“havea bamboo tree in my heart”;或者一些短语直译,如:把“不少青年妇女没文化”译成“Many young women have noculture.”,令人啼笑皆非。

  当然,这一问题主要存在于英语水平较差的同学中。而更多考生中存在的问题是不能准确把握一些词汇的具体含义及一些意思相近的词之间的一些区别,进而导致在写作中只是简单得根据自己所知道的该词的意思生硬的加在自己的习作中,而不去考虑该词在整篇文章中是否合适,从而使自己的作文有了浓重的Chinglish的味道。

  9. 词汇匮乏,作文索然无味

  由于考生掌握的词汇不足,所以在写作文时,往往是一个词在文中不断的重复出现,结果使得自己的作文读起来很索然无味。如有的考生只知道“促进”一词是improve,于是在写作时,只要是“促进”,他就把improve一词搬上去,殊不知,“促进”一词还可以用promote, enhance, advance, facilitate, strengthen等词表达。但这并不意味着这几个词可以随时互换,学生在用的时候也要根据具体的情景而选择具体的词。

  此外,有的考生在运用词组时总是不能准确把握其固定搭配,尤其是一些动词词组中具体搭配的介词等小品词,结果写出来的句子令人产生误解。这方面的问题似乎更加普遍。

  以上就是雅思写作九大细节问题的详细介绍,希望考生朋友们考出满意的雅思成绩。

 

 

 

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